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Many of my friends were born in July.


Just like today’s and yesterday’s,they are my younger sister’s 13


birthday and Lily’s(千惠) 18 birthday.


I’m proud of my sister.


She always think about me.


I swame today.


I went to Da-hu park’s swimming pool.


I swam for 10 rounds.


But it only 250m........ = =+

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Daniel
wow...the first sentence is wrong~
it should be &quotmany of my friends were born in July.&quot
for the second sentence, u don`t really have to say it together, you can say like today is my sis`s 13th birthday and yesterday was Lily`s 18th birthday.
and got one spelling mistake &quotswam&quot
last sentence should be &quoti swam for 10 rounds, but it was noly 250m.&quot
2007-07-15 15:28:50
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I revised.

Thanks!!
2007-07-15 18:06:56
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